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Oh baby please don't 
          Cry
And look at me,
         Look at me please,
I'm so sorry
        Don't scream, oh
        Come on baby
        You know me,
You love me,
        I've always been 
        Good to you
You love me right?

I know it hurts,
       And I didn't mean
       For it to come to this
Let me help you
Pull up your jeans 
Pull down your shirt 

Oh I'm sorry baby,
          Didn't mean to 
          Get your clothes all dirty
          And is that blood?
Did I do that?
         Oh baby please
Let me hold you
     Don't cry
          Don't cry
Let me love you.
Daphne and Apollo modernized.
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Pauper-Circumstance Featured By Owner Apr 22, 2013
A very interesting piece. I like how you italicized your whole poem, almost adding a sort of desperate plea to it. Great work. :D
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forbravery Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2013  Student Writer
Thank you so much, I generally like the effect of italicizing for emphasis, for me it makes the words look like they are running off the page (or screen) which makes me read them faster. I wanted it to feel immediate and desperate so I'm glad you thought it had that effect! ^_^
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Pauper-Circumstance Featured By Owner Apr 24, 2013
You're welcome. Awesome work. I might try that idea of italicizing some time. :)
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forbravery Featured By Owner Apr 30, 2013  Student Writer
It can have a great affect on a piece! Let me know if you do, I would love to read it!
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Pauper-Circumstance Featured By Owner Apr 30, 2013
Thank you for the offer. I'll let you know when I do. :)
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imaginative-lioness Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Your beautiful work has been featured on my 'Wonderful Wednesday Feature': [link] Don't forget to check out the other pieces of work :heart:!
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forbravery Featured By Owner Apr 18, 2013  Student Writer
Thank you so much! Omg!!!! I feel so honored thank you soooooo much!
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imaginative-lioness Featured By Owner Apr 18, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
You're welcome :heart:!
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forbravery Featured By Owner Apr 30, 2013  Student Writer
I am still so grateful. :3 You gave my piece a lot of exposure and that was great!
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imaginative-lioness Featured By Owner Apr 30, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Oh, I'm so glad! This is a wonderful piece and deserves the attention :heart:
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